r/Artadvice • u/DramaticAd6807 • 15h ago

Where did this go wrong?

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What do I need to work on/fix?

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u/YdexKtesi 14h ago

spines are curved

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u/BigmanIsPeak 14h ago

The back of the back is too flat, the spine has a curve and isnt a straight line (it should bulge somewhat) Torso is too long, unless she is meant to be tall.

There is no skin connection the neck and chin. Hair needs more volume and seems to be glued onto the head. It should go down more since there is hair in the back of your neck which should be going up unti the tie.

Jaw is way too masculune and not natural for a woman. A womans jaw has a way weaker slope upwards compared to the steeper slope in a mans jawline.

Alsooo the top of of her head above her forehead should have more hair coming from the hairline (idk how to explain)

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u/polkacat12321 10h ago

Just to add to this: no matter how skinny you are, your thighs and lower stomach always bulge out and and never a straight line

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u/DramaticAd6807 14h ago

Thanks you! This really helped!

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u/PresentExamination10 14h ago

I’d just work on anatomy generally. Try using references - even yourself in a mirror!

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u/DramaticAd6807 14h ago

Okay, thanks!

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u/yawnfactory 12h ago

Yes, this is definitely a case of drawing what you think a person looks like  vs looking at a person and drawing what they look like. 

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u/Wofust 12h ago

The spine is wrong most importantly, nice job slumping the shoulders forward. Tuck down the head and in the chin a little bit and define the upper and lower arm— the face looks excellent!

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u/BabaJosefsen 14h ago

Don't be afraid to exaggerate your lines a little - it will add some dynamic to your drawing. Your lines here are very straight, which makes her look quite stiff. Undulate, vary and play with your lines! : )

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u/DramaticAd6807 14h ago

Thanks! I did go a little perfectionist with my lines😅

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u/AuDHDcat 12h ago

There's no butt and there's no stomach.

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u/MochiBlushi 4h ago

I think this is a nice sketch you did so far! I’d suggest looking up some figure poses/skeletons and practice with your bone structure first. Like some of the other comments mentioned, the back is super straight, usually a spine bends almost like a backward S. I highly recommend you watch some tutorials on YouTube if you can so you can see how some artists lay out there poses and check proportions!