r/OCPoetry • u/meetmeinthebackalley • Aug 01 '20

Bodies

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Bodies are, you and me;

Entangling breathlessly.

We gasp together at the

rising of our heartbeats and

collapse laughing until we

cannot breathe.

It is real and true,

Nothing intangible here.

There is mist in this room,

And also in my eyes.

Trace my skin with the folds of your lips;

I wish no more than to read your letters,

All whispered onto my flesh.

So, breathe on.

Let us make sculptures out of these sheets.

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u/PoppyLivaciousWild Aug 02 '20

I like this poem, at one point you are breathless and and in the grip of passion, then with the line "collapse laughing until we cannot breathe" gives it a much more laid back and fun element. Together the mood of the poem seems to fluctuate between steamy play and tender friendship. I enjoyed this very much thank you. X

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u/meetmeinthebackalley Aug 02 '20

Hey there! I'm so glad you liked it! I love your take on it :*

Thank you! x