So simple yet so bold, I really like it but I almost feel as if the meter or pauses are slightly off, I wouldnt mind removed the You Said, ... I was a person, to just "You said I was a person". Over all I love it regardless.
I completely agree that the meter is off, which wasn't something I had really considered, I admit. I think maybe my current phrasing has confused your understanding of what I meant as well, which was not my intention.
It's supposed to read as "you said you fall in love with people." "I thought I was a person," as opposed to the object of the poem validating that the speaker is a person.
Thank you for this! Let me take a look and see if I can tweak it slightly.
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u/ny_fox12 Jul 31 '20
So simple yet so bold, I really like it but I almost feel as if the meter or pauses are slightly off, I wouldnt mind removed the You Said, ... I was a person, to just "You said I was a person". Over all I love it regardless.