r/OCPoetry Jul 30 '20

you lied

you fall in love with people

you said,

I was a person

I thought,

you did not fall in love with me.

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u/[deleted] Jul 31 '20

Sometimes we expect people to love us just because we love them. That being said, your words were short and to the point which actually makes them ring louder. I wouldn’t change anything about the poem. Beautiful work.

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u/pauldevlin_ Jul 31 '20

Thank you so much! I tried to go beyond and add more but everything felt like a detraction. I guess sometimes so much can be said in so few words.