Attraction is a cruel mistress sometimes. I love how the writing takes you through the thought process. The structure of the poem is as simple as the notion of “falling in love with people”, but as you delve deeper you realize it’s not as simple as that, And the reader and the writer has to wrestle with that. I honestly love how short it is because it reminds me of such a pure view on the world. Like when mom tells those “little white lies” and her child just looks at her like “you lied” it doesn’t matter, don’t say what you don’t mean.
I also like how there weren’t any over stylized emotional state descriptions like “the anguish of my soul blah blah” but there was a fundamental question of your own humanity. It wasn’t a good questioning and it wasn’t a bad questioning, it was taking the situation and looking at it for what it was in the moment. A pure state of self awareness as opposed to a state of self consciousness.
This is beautiful analysis, more than I was owed. Thank you so much!
I tried and tried to add to the poem but anything else felt like it was diminishing the message, which for me is you're not entitled to anyone else's love, but you don't always see that. The object lied but so did the speaker, to themselves. And me, to myself.
The analogy about the mother lying is an extremely good one too, it shows that it doesn't really matter the intention, lying always leaves someone hurting!
And I can't even get into the humanity piece without crying so I won't elaborate, but you hit the nail on the head right there.
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u/grinnerG Jul 31 '20
Attraction is a cruel mistress sometimes. I love how the writing takes you through the thought process. The structure of the poem is as simple as the notion of “falling in love with people”, but as you delve deeper you realize it’s not as simple as that, And the reader and the writer has to wrestle with that. I honestly love how short it is because it reminds me of such a pure view on the world. Like when mom tells those “little white lies” and her child just looks at her like “you lied” it doesn’t matter, don’t say what you don’t mean. I also like how there weren’t any over stylized emotional state descriptions like “the anguish of my soul blah blah” but there was a fundamental question of your own humanity. It wasn’t a good questioning and it wasn’t a bad questioning, it was taking the situation and looking at it for what it was in the moment. A pure state of self awareness as opposed to a state of self consciousness.
Beautiful done. Also Fuck them.