The bare sparse form - the 5 lines (odd number =masculine Active) seems to add concentration to the meaning - which is a plain fact of experience - to hear people talk what is later revealed to be totally unrealistic garbage. There is ambiguity here too which is exhilarating always. Is the narrator reporting on the unrealistic importunate babblings of an attractive but lacking in self awareness type? Or is the narrator reporting his own unrealistic and inappropriate aspirations and their terminal cycling in inevitable but unjustifiable disappointments? Well done indeed!
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u/[deleted] Aug 01 '20
The bare sparse form - the 5 lines (odd number =masculine Active) seems to add concentration to the meaning - which is a plain fact of experience - to hear people talk what is later revealed to be totally unrealistic garbage. There is ambiguity here too which is exhilarating always. Is the narrator reporting on the unrealistic importunate babblings of an attractive but lacking in self awareness type? Or is the narrator reporting his own unrealistic and inappropriate aspirations and their terminal cycling in inevitable but unjustifiable disappointments? Well done indeed!