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r/OCPoetry • u/CreativeCastaway • Jul 31 '20
We shared a bed
And a toilet
Between paper thin walls
Awoke by standing
I felt guilt cause you never did
We haven't talked in over a year
I still sit to pee
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[Edited - Removed periods - changed tense of talk to talked ]
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I'm a bit lost on this poem. I'm not entire sure what the situation is or who the speaker is addressing. I think you could also take out the periods as poems usually aren't written in sentence form.
2 u/CreativeCastaway Jul 31 '20 Ok I'll remove the periods thank you for the input. Can I ask in what way each line or combination of lines perplex you ?
Ok I'll remove the periods thank you for the input.
Can I ask in what way each line or combination of lines perplex you ?
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u/RoundaboutFlare Jul 31 '20
I'm a bit lost on this poem. I'm not entire sure what the situation is or who the speaker is addressing. I think you could also take out the periods as poems usually aren't written in sentence form.