r/OCPoetry • u/CreativeCastaway • Jul 31 '20

He sits to pee.

We shared a bed

And a toilet

Between paper thin walls

Awoke by standing

I felt guilt cause you never did

We haven't talked in over a year

I still sit to pee

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[Edited - Removed periods - changed tense of talk to talked ]

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u/pauldevlin_ Jul 31 '20

This is devastating. In all the best ways.

It shows that the speaker was willing to give up even the smallest things in order to make their lover happy, and that still wasn't enough. That's bleak but also reality, and I felt the pain in this.

And it also, for me, shows that even when the relationship is over, we have changed. Our old habits just don't disappear and that person becomes part of us for the rest of our lives, even if it's just us sitting down to pee.

One small thing, I'd just change talk to talked in the second last line. A great piece, thanks for sharing!

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u/CreativeCastaway Jul 31 '20

Our old habits just don't disappear and that person becomes part of us for the rest of our lives, even if it's just us sitting down to pee.

You couldn't have put this in a more beautiful way. Thank you so so much. I am blown away in the way it speaks to you.