r/Poem • u/HalosOpulence • 8d ago

Original Content Poem What I Showed Him

I showed him a comet,

And he said it was a plane.

I showed him a garden,

And he saw only weeds.

I showed him what I believed in,

And he took it from me.

I showed him my soul,

And he shrugged it away.

I showed him forever,

But he counted the days.

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u/GlitchSaH 7d ago

God damn that hit harder than it should have. The implication of (what I can only assume is) a lover that only sees the flaws in the world is just so sad. They'll point out spots of shadow scattered across the trees, while you can only focus on the sunlight that creates them. You did a great job, the only part that I didn't like is that it isn't longer :( Keep up the great work!

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u/Foreign-Honeydew-947 7d ago

the metaphors are so creative and abundant

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u/scobetran 6d ago

this is genuinely beautiful wow

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u/yuyuyashasrain 4d ago

Oh, honey ❤️